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陈传光男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师、连云港市优秀教育园丁、江苏省教育学会会员，从事教育工作15年：曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖、班主任基本功大赛市一等奖：有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表;曾指导学生在各类竞赛中取得不错的成绩，有多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
Facing Setbacks with a Smile
I love singing very much and I entered a singing competition last year. Every personaround me said， "You are a talent. You will sure① become a great singer when you grow up.Therefore， I had confident② in myself. I thought I would at least reach the finals. However，there were too many competitors who sang much better than me. I was knocked out in the firstround. I couldn’ t help cry③ sadly.
But my parents told me not to cry. "You should dry your tears. Be brave and keepsmiling." They were right. Failure is not the end of the world. What matters is how to face itcorrectly. Face setbacks with a smile and then you’ll successful④ in the near future.
江苏省连云港市罗阳中学陆文凯
1.优点：
本文记叙了小作者参加唱歌比赛遭遇挫折的经历，文章最后点明主题：要微笑面对挫折方能取得成功。整篇文章文字流畅，用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。
2.需要修改的地方：
①sure改为surely。修饰动词become，要使用副词surely。
②confident改为conficlence。have后接名词。
③cry改为crying。can’t help doing sth.意为“禁不住做某事”。
④successful改为be successful或succeed。will后應接动词原形。
3.评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。
陈传光男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师、连云港市优秀教育园丁、江苏省教育学会会员，从事教育工作15年：曾获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖、班主任基本功大赛市一等奖：有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表;曾指导学生在各类竞赛中取得不错的成绩，有多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
Facing Setbacks with a Smile
I love singing very much and I entered a singing competition last year. Every personaround me said， "You are a talent. You will sure① become a great singer when you grow up.Therefore， I had confident② in myself. I thought I would at least reach the finals. However，there were too many competitors who sang much better than me. I was knocked out in the firstround. I couldn’ t help cry③ sadly.
But my parents told me not to cry. "You should dry your tears. Be brave and keepsmiling." They were right. Failure is not the end of the world. What matters is how to face itcorrectly. Face setbacks with a smile and then you’ll successful④ in the near future.
江苏省连云港市罗阳中学陆文凯
1.优点：
本文记叙了小作者参加唱歌比赛遭遇挫折的经历，文章最后点明主题：要微笑面对挫折方能取得成功。整篇文章文字流畅，用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。
2.需要修改的地方：
①sure改为surely。修饰动词become，要使用副词surely。
②confident改为conficlence。have后接名词。
③cry改为crying。can’t help doing sth.意为“禁不住做某事”。
④successful改为be successful或succeed。will后應接动词原形。
3.评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。